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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia ercentage of city residents 70% 65% 60% 55% 50% 45% 40% 35% 30% 25% 20% Sydney Melbourne Brisbane Adelaide Hobart Bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks Bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks Went to a café for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia ercentage of city residents 70% 65% 60% 55% 50% 45% 40% 35% 30% 25% 20% Sydney Melbourne Brisbane Adelaide Hobart Bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks Bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks Went to a café for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks
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The bar chart illustrates survey results in
percentage
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about
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 the
populaton’s
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population’s
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 tea and
coffee
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 purchase and consumption habits in five regions in Australia. The following categories of
people
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 were considered those that; bought fresh
coffee
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, bought
instant
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coffee
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, and went to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea all in the
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 4 weeks.
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, it is evident that a large proportion of the
people
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 in most of the areas predominantly went to a
cafe
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 for
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drinks, particularly in Melbourne and Hobart,
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people
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 in Adelaide showed an equal choice for buying
instant
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coffee
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 the least significant share goes to those who bought fresh
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 during the period.
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, looking at the percentage of the residents that visited a
cafe
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, the largest was in Melbourne and in Hobart, both accounting for almost 65%.
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 is followed by Sydney at slightly above 60%. In comparison, less than 60% of the
people
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 in other areas are in
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 group.
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, turning to buying
instant
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coffee
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 and getting fresh one, in Adelaide, most of the residents, exactly 50% preferred to buy
instant
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coffee
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, approximately the same figure as those who chose
going
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 to a
cafe
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 in
this
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 city. Even though the highest fraction of
this
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 preference was recorded in Hobart at just under 55%. Contrarily, the practice of buying fresh
coffee
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 emerged as the least selected practice in general, with the most significant share (almost 45%) seen in Syndey and the smallest in Brisbane and Adelaide, both around 35%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, instant, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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