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The pie chart provides a breakdown by type of transport and car in Edmonton with the table chart indicating whether the reason for using the car in city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart provides a breakdown by type of transport and car in Edmonton with the table chart indicating whether the reason for using the car in city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
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 illustrates the information on types of transport
people
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using
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use
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 in
Edmonton
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,
while
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 the table charts
gives
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give
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 various grounds
of
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for
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 using
car
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the car
a car
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 in the same city.
Overall
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, the data from
pie
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the pie
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chart
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 ensures that, in
Edmonton
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 primary mode of transit is
car
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a car
the car
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, among other three- light rail transit, bus and taxi. And, the table
chart
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 shows us that, the
cars
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 are mostly used for business
purpose
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purposes
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 and drive to work.
To begin
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 with
pie
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a pie
the pie
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chart
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, more than a
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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 population in
Edmonton
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 opt
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cars
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for cars
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 as the main mode of transport. Following
cars
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,
with
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apply
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35% of
people
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 chose the light train transit. Interstingly, both
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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 were used by one in ten
people
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 in
Edmonton
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. The provided table
chart
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,
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apply
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 shows the different reasons for
people
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 to choose
car
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a car
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 over other transits. The
cars
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 are primarily used for
commute
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commuting
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 to work with more than half of
people
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 depending on it.
Likewise
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, 45% utilized
cars
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 for business purposes,
wheras
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whereas
, 40% used
it
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them
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 for dropping kids to school.
Additionally
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, in
Edmonton
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, for leisure activities and shopping,
the
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apply
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cars
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 are only used by a minority .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, people, edmonton, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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