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Writing Samples
Band 3

Many countries want to host international sports event, while other countries think that hosting sports events has some problems that benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.(

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Some countries are
despirated
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desperate
desperately
 to hold
an
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apply
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interneational
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international
 sports events on their land,
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 others supposed that there can be some drawbacks as well. I personally think that it is a good opportunity for a nation to host a global activity, which can
brings
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 not only
the
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economic growth but
also
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 residential identity. On the one hand, international sports
event
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events
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 may attract
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an abundent
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abundent
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abundant
abundance
 of
tourist
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tourists
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 to the capital, which can impact the
environments
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environment
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 by causing more
pollutions
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pollution
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.
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,
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the audiens
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audiens
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audience
 often
remain
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 massive trash after watching the match, they only focus on the games
instead
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 of
habitants
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habitant
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awarness
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awareness
.
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, when governments build more buildings to embrace the competition, they might forget to implement the green policy or eco-friendly rules to the
counstructions
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constructions
construction
.
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, the efforts of welcoming the events could be a waste or
polltion
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pollution
afterall
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after all
.
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, the increasing population of
tourist
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tourists
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 can make a significant change
for
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 the economy of the central.
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, there will be more job
vaccancies
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vacancies
 for unemployed people or customers will stimulate the
markeing
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marketing
market
 flow, which can make the authorities and local people be beneficial.
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, the reputation of the country may be advanced in the world. In conclusion, I agree that it is worth
to introduce
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 international sports events in a country,
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 the politics should set some rules to protect the
envionments
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environment
environments
 for a longer consideration.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states both perspectives on the issue. This helps set the context for your discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader. This enhances your logical structure and makes your writing easier to follow.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This enhances the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and spelling errors. For example, 'despirated' should be 'desperate', and 'interneational' should be 'international'. Correct spellings and grammar will significantly improve clarity.
task achievement
You effectively express your personal opinion in the introduction, which is important for task response.
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective on the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • National pride
  • Fosters
  • International relations
  • Bolsters
  • Economic gains
  • Economic burden
  • Long-term debt
  • Infrastructure improvements
  • Cultural exchange
  • Mutual understanding
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Commercialization
  • Gentrification
  • Displacing
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