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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below the poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below the poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides key information about 3 US states including: age and average salary, and percentage of people below
poverty
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the poverty
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 line.
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, it's clear from the graph that there
is
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 huge differences in
bettween
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between
 the various states.
In addition
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, California seems to have the highest population below
poverty
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the poverty
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 line,
whereas
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 Utah
had
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 the lowest rate.
According to
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 what is shown, California and Florida hold a similar percentage of people under the age of 18,
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17% and 16% respectively. yet there was a 10% difference in elders over 60, where it was 13% and 23%.
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While the
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 average income in California was
a
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1000
dollar
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dollars
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 more than the other
state
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states
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 valued at 23000. In terms of Utah, it took the lead at the top percentage of
aged
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those aged
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 under 18 with 28%.
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 the other
hand
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 Utah overcame the two states with regards to aged over 60 and the average salary per person, for 8% and 9% respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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