IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books becuse they will be able to read everything they want online without paying To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
in the future ,no one will buy newspapers,magazines,or books so there will be no need to print them because people will be able to read whatever they want online without paying for it.
This
Linking Words
 essay will agree with the statement because of
having
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
electronic
devidec
Correct your spelling
devices
 nowadays, there where
there
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
are
any
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
different methods
fo
Correct your spelling
for
show examples
 finding fresh materials, which can be
also
Linking Words
 used in coming and society does not have to pay for
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
.
to begin
Linking Words
 with ,there
a
Add a missing verb
are a
show examples
lot of different dates
such
Linking Words
 as applications and chats with robots that can be helpful to find information rapidly and other information sources for each individual.
for example
Linking Words
, research conducted by Google has shown application called litres is one of the most common forms
to
Change preposition
of
show examples
 reading books. 85% of people use Google and it is a very important system for the world.
Instead
Linking Words
 of buying newspapers and magazines, people use a lot of online platforms
for example
Linking Words
 ; YouTube, safari and media channels, rather than spend money on finding informational contact. so in the future , there will probably be more sources that will be available for individuals. In conclusion, if today the topic of online searching
instead
Linking Words
 of giving cash to read news is a really common topic,
then
Linking Words
 in the future it will be more likely to be used because it is much more convenient and less hard to get new stuff.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the prompt clearly in your introduction. Rather than just stating you agree, also briefly outline your reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and typos, such as 'devidec' (devices) and 'where' (were) to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs, which will enhance the flow of your essay.
task achievement
You demonstrate an understanding of the topic and present a clear opinion throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
You provide multiple sources of information to support your main ideas, which shows effort in development.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: