A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.He/She has ask for your advice. write a letter to your friednd.in your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you whould like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Navi, I hope you're doing well. I am writing

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you a suggestion for

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summer

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the summer

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campaign

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. First of all, You are going to have full fun on the

summer

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camping holiday because of

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weather and

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, we can wear comfortable clothes

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our choice during

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summers

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which will make you feel more enjoyable.

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of people so it will be

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memorable moment for you as you can play games in groups. Sadly, there are various demerits of

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that

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tanning on our

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and in

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all animals come out to enjoy

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so, sometimes there is

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. I would suggest you

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with your classmates but always try to stay in

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which will reduce issues related to

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, I want to tell you that I cannot join

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camping

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as I have to go to my

cousion's

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cousin's

marriage. I will try to come next time. Best regards, Suman

sumanpreetkaurkhela81Mon Mar 03 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Consider organizing your ideas more clearly by using paragraphs effectively. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that your sentences are clear and concise to enhance understanding.

task achievement

Try to expand on the disadvantages with more examples or explanations to provide a fuller response.

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Maintain a friendly and casual tone suitable for a letter to a friend, but clarify your suggestions further.

tone

The letter has a friendly tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.

content

You made a good effort to include both advantages and disadvantages of camping, showing a balanced view.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

177 words

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some people think that government should spend money on faster public transportation, while others think there are other more important priorities such as healthcare and the environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or a negative development?

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