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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017) 4 3.5 3 Millions of visitors 2.5 N 1.5 0.5 0 2010 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 •* * Visitors staying on cruise ships - Visitors staying on island -O- Total

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017) 4 3.5 3 Millions of visitors 2.5 N 1.5 0.5 0 2010 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 •* * Visitors staying on cruise ships - Visitors staying on island -O- Total
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of visitors to a particular Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017. The data was grouped into; those staying on a cruise ship, on the
island
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 and the total
number
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.
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,
it is clear that
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 the sum total of tourists to
this
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island
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 went up substantially and steadily over the period given,
likewise
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, those that stayed on cruise ships,
whereas
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 the
number
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 staying on the
island
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 only saw a modest
increase
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.
To begin
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, looking at the data with a significant
increase
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, in 2010, the total sum of visitors was 1
million
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 and climbed steadily to well above 2.5
million
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 in 2015.  Despite being stable for one year, it surged to 3.5
million
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 in 2017.
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, the
number
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 of visitors that stayed on cruise ships saw an
increase
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 to 0.5
million
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 during the first year, which was almost double the starting figure. It experienced a slight fall back to the initial
number
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,
then
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 grew significantly to 2
million
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at the end
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 of the period.
However
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, considering the tourists that stayed on the
island
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, the
number
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 started at nearly 1
million
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. It remained for one year before a modest
increase
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 to 1.5
million
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 in 2013. Between 2013 and 2015, it was relatively constant.
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 a fluctuating decrease and
increase
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 back to the
last
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 figure was seen in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, increase, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "modest" was used 2 times.
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