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Band 3.5

You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter, tell your friend about the party ask for the recipe explain ntwhy you need the recipe from his/her country

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Dear Darshan, I hope you are doing well! I am organising
one
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 birthday party for my sister next week and for the food menu
of
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for
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 that
party
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party,
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 I am thinking
to use
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of using
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few
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a few
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 foreign
recipe
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recipes
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 to make
party
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the party
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 special and classy. I know that you are
leaving
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living
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 in
mexico
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Mexico
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 and
i
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I
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 heard about
few
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a few
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mexican
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Mexican
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 plates that are really good in taste and easy to make because I
decide
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decided
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 to make that special plates for my sister by
my self
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myself
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. I would like to ask about
few
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a few
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recipe
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recipes
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 like
mexican
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Mexican
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 rice,
noddles
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noodles
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 and
few
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a few
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 more that you know how to make. I love to make
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apply
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mexican
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Mexican
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 rice for
sister
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my sister
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 because whenever we
are going
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 outside for lunch and dinner,
everytime
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every time
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 she
is giving
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gives
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the order
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order
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orders
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 for that plate.

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task achievement
Consider adding a little more detail about the party, such as its theme or location, to better engage your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. For example, separate the request for the recipe from the explanation of why you want it, providing clearer sections for your letter.
general
Make sure to proofread for small errors such as "few foreign recipe" (should be "few foreign recipes") and "I know that you are leaving in Mexico" (should be "living in Mexico").
task achievement
Your friendly tone effectively communicates your intentions and makes the letter personable.
task achievement
You did well to express your desire to make the party special with foreign dishes, which indicates your enthusiasm and effort.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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