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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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charts
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chart
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 depicts the number of families owned electrical appliances. And
also
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 represents
number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
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 spent doing housework in families in one country. showing the period of time from 1920 until 2019.
overall
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 it is clear from the charts that, all electrical appliances percentage started low and raised gradually.
In addition
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,
number
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the number
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 of
hours
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 spent doing housework
decrease
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decreased
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 regularly until 2019.
According to
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 what is shown, refrigerators started to appear after 1920. It ratio raised dramatically after that,
where
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when
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 it reached 100% in 2019.
Washing
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The washing
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 machine began at 40% and raised
steadly
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steadily
,
then
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 remained constant at about 70%. Vacuum Cleaner in 1920 was used by 30% of households,
then
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 it continued to rise
consistantly
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consistently
 where
it
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apply
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reached
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reaching
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 100% in 2019. In terms of
hours
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 spent by families
in
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on
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 housework. In 1920, about 50
hours
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 per week was used for
this
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 purpose. but in 1920 it was 35%
percent
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per cent
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, and
then
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 it continued the decrement. In 2019 the rate was 10
hours
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 per week, and
this
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 was the lowest ratio compared to the previous years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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