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Band 4

The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to encourage people from the suburbs or the countryside to live in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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that
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is
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the most effective way to end
traffic
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 and
tansport
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transport
problems
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 in the
city
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 is to encourage
people
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 from the
suburbs
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 and countryside to live in the
city
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. I
dissagree
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disagree
 and do not think it is right to
till
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tell
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 the families who
are
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apply
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live in the
suburbs
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 and
countryside
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the countryside
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 to come
in
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 the
city
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 will solve the
traffic
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problems
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. Because the
traffic
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 will not
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 it will
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double
for example
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people
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the people
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 who are
live
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life
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 in the
city
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 4000 and the cars 2000 if the
people
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 in the countryside move to the
city
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 it will be 5000 and the cars 2500 it is
apsolotly
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absolutely
 will not solve any
problem
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 and the jobs that on the
suburbs
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 will move on the
city
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 and
this
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 will make a big cars
traffic
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 in the work times. whatever It will
effect
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affect
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 on the
devolpmnt
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development
 of the
city
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 space it will not solve the
traffic
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 and transport
problems
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also
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i
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tink
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think
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 the best way to
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solve
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this
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problem
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 is to
devolp
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develop
 the space of the
city
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 and
mike
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make
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 it bigger I know it is a bit hard bit but it is best than mike
people
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 on the
countreyside
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countryside
 move to the cities and the
suburbs
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 will be a
dengres
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danger
 area because it will be abandoned .
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 it is not the best way to solve
this
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problem
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 and
i
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beleve
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believe
 that will
effeict
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effect
affect
 Negatively on the
city
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 more than solve a
problem
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 it will cause
a more big
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more big problems
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problems
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 even if it
solve
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solves
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 the
traffic
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 and transport
problem
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.

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task achievement
Try to clarify your position more clearly in the introduction. Clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement and provide a brief outline of your reasons.
coherence and cohesion
Improve logical flow between the points in your paragraphs. Use transition words like 'firstly,' 'however,' and 'in conclusion' to guide the reader.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. Instead of just mentioning numbers, try to elaborate on the consequences of increased traffic or give examples of cities that faced similar issues.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling and grammatical errors. For example, 'dissagree' should be 'disagree,' and 'apsolotly' should be 'absolutely.' Proofreading can help reduce these small errors.
argument development
You present a clear stance against the idea of encouraging suburban or countryside families to move to the city, which is a good start for your argument.
idea relevance
The discussion about the potential increase in traffic is relevant and shows your understanding of the problem.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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  • overpopulation
  • infrastructure
  • public transport system
  • commute times
  • peak hours
  • density
  • urban infrastructure
  • sustainable living
  • satellite cities
  • digital solutions
  • remote work
  • regional lifestyle diversity
  • traffic congestion
  • suburban and rural areas
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