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The chart and the table below give information about health care resources and the life expectancy in different countries . summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison when relevant.

The chart and the table below give information about health care resources and the life expectancy in different countries . summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison when relevant.
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The chart and table show
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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 resources of
health
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the health
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filed
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field
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 and the average age in 8 different countries .
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Japan
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 has the highest
number
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 of hospital beds per thousand of the population ,
while
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 the lowest can be seen in
United
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the United
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state
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States
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.
Also
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 in
US
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the US
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 health care spending per person has
the a
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a
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 large amount of money , followed by
Japan
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 . In
Japan
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 the
number
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 of hospital beds is around 14 per cent ,
as
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which
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it
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is
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 the highest
compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to
others
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other
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 countries followed by Germany has about 8 , after that there is
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 roughly 6 . With regard to
similarity
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similarity,
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 three countries have
same
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the same
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number
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 which
is
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apply
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Canada , Spain and ,
United
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the United
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 States with
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number
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a number
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 around 3 . Regarding government health spending, in
US
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the US
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 each person
spend
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spends
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 on Healthcare around 6719 with
average
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an average
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 age
78
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of 78
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 .
However
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 ,
Japan
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 is lower than
US
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the US
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 in terms of the Amount of money
spending
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spent
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 on Healthcare 2581 ,but the average age is above
than
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the
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 US
it
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which
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 is 83 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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