This diagram below give information on transport and car in Edmoton

This diagram below give information on transport and car in Edmoton
IELTS Writing Task Chart for This diagram below give information on transport and car in Edmoton
The pie chart illustrates how
mode
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the mode
a mode
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of
transprotation
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transportation
various
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with their percentage of usage.
this
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data is from Edmonton over
the
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a
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period of time.With that broadly speaking about
table
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the table
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that different places where public use their
vehicals
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vehicles
. Overview,The majority of people travel
with
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by
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private
car
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with the
higgest
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highest
percentage of four ways of travel which are
car
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,LRT,bus,
taxi
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and taxi
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.
Also
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mainly people prefer their
car
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for
proffessional
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professional
purpose
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purposes
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with 55% to 45%. At the start,
bus
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buses
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and
taxi
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taxis
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both are
similarly
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at 10%
whereas
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, LRT is at 15%
of
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apply
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more
that
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than
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bus
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buses
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and
taxi
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taxis
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.
Furthermore
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,
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car
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cars
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is
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are
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at
highest
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the highest
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of 45%.
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Also
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car
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is mostly used by
public
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the public
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in
subhubs
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sub hubs
for
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apply
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to
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apply
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travel to
the
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apply
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work or at their business enterprise both are at
the
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a
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difference of 10%. In comparison,shopping and Leisure
activites
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activities
are
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have
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at
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an
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equal share at 15%.
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Although
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, taking children to school is
also
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keen
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a keen
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contributor to 40% of all.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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