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This diagram below give information on transport and car in Edmoton

This diagram below give information on transport and car in Edmoton
The pie chart illustrates how
mode
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the mode
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 of
transprotation
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transportation
various
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 with their percentage of usage.
this
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 data is from Edmonton over
the
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a
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 period of time.With that broadly speaking about
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the table
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 that different places where public use their
vehicals
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vehicles
. Overview,The majority of people travel
with
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by
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 private
car
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 with the
higgest
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highest
 percentage of four ways of travel which are
car
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,LRT,bus,
taxi
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and taxi
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.
Also
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 mainly people prefer their
car
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 for
proffessional
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professional
purpose
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purposes
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 with 55% to 45%. At the start,
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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 both are
similarly
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 at 10%
whereas
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, LRT is at 15%
of
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apply
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more
that
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than
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bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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.
Furthermore
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,
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car
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cars
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is
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are
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 at
highest
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the highest
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 of 45%.
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Also
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Also,
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car
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 is mostly used by
public
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the public
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 in
subhubs
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sub hubs
for
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apply
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to
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apply
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travel to
the
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apply
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work or at their business enterprise both are at
the
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a
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 difference of 10%. In comparison,shopping and Leisure
activites
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activities
are
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have
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at
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an
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 equal share at 15%.
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Although
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, taking children to school is
also
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keen
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a keen
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 contributor to 40% of all.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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