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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the number of hours spent by each
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teaching in different schools in four different countries,
such
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 as Japan, Spain, Iceland, and
USA
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the USA
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. The data was taken in the year 2001.
Overall
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, there was fluctuating time spent by the tutor in educating
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every class.
Firstly
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, the highest number of hours was
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 United States. The total started above 700 in the primary course, and experienced upward to 1000 in the Lower Secondary session,
then
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 continued to increase nearly to 1200 in the Upper Secondary group.
Secondly
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, the count of the Upper Secondary class in Spain and Iceland was similar.
In addition
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, Spain and Japan had almost equal
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 in the Primary and Lower Secondary courses.
On the other hand
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, the development of time teaching in Japan tended to increase slightly. The Primary began
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 600 to the Upper Secondary program in 700.
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, in Iceland, the amount of time educating in the Primary and Lower Secondary groups was nearly the same.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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