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The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012
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The maps illustrate the changes of Frenton over a 22-year period between 1990 and 2012 Generally,
it is clear that
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 the Frenton experiences striking transformations. Most
noticeably
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, the development
in
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of
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construct
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 of the
Flats
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, and
redevelopment
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the redevelopment
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the
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 Bank into a Restaurant. In the year 1990, the
town
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 was a much entertainment centers and
hotel
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, but during the next 22 years, the
town
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 saw a number of significant changes. A School on the
nouth-west
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north-west
south-west
side
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 of the
town
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 still remained. Opposite the School is the Bank but now was changed to a Restaurant, and the Playing Fields With Trees on the
nouth
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north
south
side
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 of
town
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 converted into Blocks Of
Flats
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.
Moreover
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, the
Hopital
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Hospital
 opposite Playing Fields With Trees development
than
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in
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 1990, and the Trees on the south-west
side
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 of the
town
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was
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were
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 redevelopment into Technopark In
contrasr
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contrast
, the
nouth-east
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northeast
side
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 of the High Street
Flats
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were construct
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by
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in
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 2012. The Cafe And Park on the east
side
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 of the
town
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replace
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are replaced
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into
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by
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Hotel
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the Hotel
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 And Golf Course, and the Hotel And Golf Course opposite
Cinema
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the Cinema
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. The Cafe And Park right Houses development Blocks Of
Flats
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,
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 and the Shops south-east
side
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 of the
town
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Supermaket
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Supermarket
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words flats, town, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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