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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some tourists prefer to
staying
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 for a long time or
living
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 in foreign
counties
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countries
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, and sometimes it can be a big problem for them.
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, it will bring to person a
lot
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experience
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of experience
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 and improve a
language
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. In
this
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firstly
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about
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how
people
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 can improve
using
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by using
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 another
language
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 in society,
then
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added
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add
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 why using external
language
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 may develop social
skill
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skills
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,
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finally
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and finally
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 it will be better if
people
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started
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 to learn
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language
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the language
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 and
using
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 it in
community
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the community
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.
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 with,
while
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 someone
speak
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 in various languages,
people
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 are getting used to using it.
In addition
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, it can help someone
joining to
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join
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 the company and
having
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have
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dialogue
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a dialogue
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 with humans. Interacting
to
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with
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 different
human
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humans
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 can aid them
understanding
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in understanding
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 complex sentences or having outstanding
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 about grammar.
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, when
people
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 learn
new
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language
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,
thay
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they
 may learn cultures of the country.
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,
people
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 mainly, who
instead
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 of living in their countries live in other countries, like
studing
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studying
 their
language
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 and culture. Some communities from Ukraine like
living
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those living
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 in Russia or Belarus. Humans, who like talking with a
lot
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 of diverse
company
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companies
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 or who have a
lot
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 of bonds, prefer to talk in other languages.
Due to
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counties
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countries
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 can be more friendly and easy to get new friends.
Furthermore
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, it shows that studying new languages can provide
to
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human
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humans
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 new
opportunity
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opportunities
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.
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, some
people
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 like using their knowledge
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to get
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 a
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 of friends and bonds. In conclusion, knowing
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 will be outstanding
,
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 if we start
use
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using
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 it
on
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in
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 society.
In
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contrast
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 we learn it but don't use
in
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it in
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daily
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our daily
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 routine
that is
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 our big problem.  Because it may be
good
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a good
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 boost being good in society.

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task achievement
Try to clarify your argument more clearly in the introduction. Instead of stating general intentions, specify your stance on the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph should have a clear main point that is directly related to your argument. Ensure that your ideas are fully developed.
task achievement
Revisit your examples to ensure they directly support your main points. Some examples could be more relevant to enhance your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs to ensure that the ideas connect logically and smoothly.
task achievement
You successfully introduce the topic and acknowledge its complexity, which is a good foundation for your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps the reader navigate your ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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