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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Being in a state where you should speak another
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, can
cause
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 many social
problems
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.
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 it can create
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while
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 talking with locals. A great number of
people
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, who
wants
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want
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 to escape from their motherland because of civil war, economic
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crisis
,
cruel
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and cruel
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 government, migrate to another country. Especially
to
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in
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 Europe, and
there
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where
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 they face a lot of
problems
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, for
examle
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example
 discrimination, racism. Lots of
problems
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 can start because of not understanding each other.
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 foreigner did something wrong and natives want to warn them, and because of
language
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problems
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problems,
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 they can argue. Some
people
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 say that migrants should learn
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language
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the language
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 of
nation
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the nation
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 where they live,
minimum
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the minimum
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 they should have skills
of
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in
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 English. Another problem is,
when
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that when
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people
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 do not know dialects, every city or region
have
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 their own style of talking and sometimes it can
cause
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problems
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, even natives can not understand each other. Most of
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this
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these
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problems
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 can
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be
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oneselves
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seen
 in supermarkets, hospitals and drugstores. But, if
people
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will
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respect each other, most of
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this
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these
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 disagreements can
solve
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be solved
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. If every local
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 his migrant
neighboor
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neighbour
neighbours
 how to correctly speak their
language
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 and support them it will positively react
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people
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, and
by
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in
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time
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the time
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 they will adopt and have some
language
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 skills. But there are a lot of countries where it
do
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 not
cause
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 a problem.
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 countries with similar
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 families like Russian, Serbian,
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and Ukranian
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.
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This
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 languages are very similar to each
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 and very easy to understand. In conclusion, living in a country where a foreign
language
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 is required can lead to significant social and practical challenges.
This
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 type of
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problems
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 can
baddly
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badly
effect
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affect
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on
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communication and
cause
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 enmity between them.

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grammar
Make sure to proofread for grammatical errors and typos, such as 'crisiss' instead of 'crisis' and 'examle' instead of 'example'.
content
Provide more specific examples to illustrate the problems caused by language barriers, which could strengthen your argument.
coherence
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance overall flow.
content
You present a clear argument agreeing that language barriers can cause social problems.
content
You identify practical situations where miscommunication can lead to issues, which helps contextualize your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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