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The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962. Umar

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in Meadowside village and Fonton, a neighbouring town, since 1962. Umar
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The three maps illustrate information about the transformation that took place in
Meadowside
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 urban area and
Fonton
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 , a neighbouring
city
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 from 1962 .
Overall
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,the
Meadowside
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 village dramatically changed .
While
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,
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 the rails next to
Fonton
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in
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on
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west
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the west
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 side remained unchanged over the years. In
the
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1962
city
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 was completely empty , in spite of the small
Meadowside
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 area which connected with a road throwing from east to
the
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apply
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north
also
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 in another part of
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city
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the city
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 was a railway in a
Fonton
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 .
During
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From
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 1962
-
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1985
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to 1985
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 the government added some changes , first of all ,
Fonton
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 became
bigger
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a bigger
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of
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apply
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square.
However
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,
railway
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a railway
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 was constructed. The
Meadowside
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 rural grew in size ,thereby inside the area was built
housing
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a housing
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 estate,
in
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and in
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 the centre of
settlement
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the settlement
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 was constructed a Leisure complex.Citizens established new
road
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roads
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, turned
into
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apply
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widened and better, across
throughout
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apply
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the
city
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 and intersected with
old
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the old
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road
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roads
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. Nearby the centre was erected
station
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a station
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,
on the other hand
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,people
decide
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decided
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 to assemble a railway,
from
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and from
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 new constructions were made a business park and above
station
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the station
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 a hotel.In
Meadowside
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 suburbs
except
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except for
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 housing
estate
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estates
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,which usage of
square
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squares
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sequently
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sequentially
 transformed ,
were
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was
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 replaced
nothing
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by nothing
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meadowside, fonton, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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