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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate data about the
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road
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roads
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 of city
hospital
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hospitals
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 between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, it's clear that
there're
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there are
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 a
little
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apply
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bit
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few
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 changes. Builders replaced
bus
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stations
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 and public car
park
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parks
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.
Also
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, they decided to rebuild a
road
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 which is in front of
hospital
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the hospital
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. Looking at the information in more detail, we can notice that they built a new public car park.
Moreover
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, they did not change the staff car park, but
bus
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stations
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 were replaced. They built new places for new
bus
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stations
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 which
was
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 in
south
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the south
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 part of
map
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the map
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. Hospital
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road
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Road
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 and
ring
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Ring Road
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road
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 did not have any changes.
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, the builders add
there
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their
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 new roundabouts.
Furthermore
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, the 6 old
bus
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stations
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 were in the west and east part of
map
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the map
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus, stations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road access
  • city hospital
  • traffic flow
  • public transport facilities
  • intersection
  • roundabout
  • car park
  • dedicated
  • modifications
  • congestion
  • accessibility
  • hospital entrance
  • parking areas
  • main features
  • signage
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