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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given maps illustrate alternatives of Porth Hourbours at two various points in time namely, 2000 and the present.
Overall
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, it was important that the number of facilities and places for passengers have been increased
after
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in
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 the long run.
According to
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 the diagrams, in the beginning, the north of the area had just one Duck,
then
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 it improved to
the
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apply
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two ducks. But
public
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the public
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beach
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beaches
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 and passenger furrieries are the same as
prior
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in prior
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 times. In the south, we can see a district that had Castle,
lifeboat
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a lifeboat
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,
public
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a public
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 beach, and a
road
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. Today,
Castle
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the Castle
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 is replaced by
Hotel
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a Hotel
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 and the public beach become
the
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a
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 privet one for Hotel guests.
Moreover
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,
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road
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a road
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develop
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develops
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 to the Hotel and near the old lifeboat has been established the Cafés and shops. The pictures demonstrate that nowadays,
main
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the main
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road
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, the car parks, and
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the shower
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shower
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showers
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 & toilets are the same as the previous time.
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, these days, the place of
Marina
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the Marina
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, and Fishing bout
change
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changed
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;
additionally
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, a new shower and toilets
build
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built
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 near the now Marina. And the pass of
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the carpark
a carpark
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carpark
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car park
,
where
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which
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 is near the old fishing
bout
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boat
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,
connect
Correct subject-verb agreement
connects
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 to the main
road
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.

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task achievement
Clarify the purpose of your introduction and ensure it captures the main features of the maps clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance logical flow by using more cohesive devices to link your ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
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Include a conclusion that summarizes the main findings to help reinforce your points.
task achievement
You successfully identified changes over time, which is essential for this task.
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You used specific examples from the maps to support your comparisons, showing a good understanding of the content.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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