Write a letter to a transport office about a problem with the transportation system in your area. •Describe the situation you are facing •Why do you consider it a problem •What change you would like to recommend.

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Greetings Mr/Mrs, I'm writing about my concern towards public transportation in Jakarta. We, as

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user

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of the MRT, currently facing a problem that needs to be solved

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the help of your office. As we all know, we are now entering the rainy season, and

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creates some minor and major problems that

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your attention immediately

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because

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affecting the experience of the user.

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the station is not integrated

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another transportation system, so when

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raining, the floor becomes slippery from the water drip

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from the jacket, or from the umbrellas.

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when experiencing delay, the operator did not inform the passengers about the delay's estimation time,

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causes

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people to

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inside the car, as we

also

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dont

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don't

have a good phone signal underground.

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, the ticketing

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improvement because

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even though

your company provides 5

gate

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, 2 of them

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not working, and in rush hour,

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causing a commotion. I'd like to

reccomend

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recommend

you

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provide

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plastic for umbrellas to minimize the water drip for the first problem.

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you might want to consider rewriting the announcement format and include the time estimation. For the

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problem, please fix the gate in the middle of the day so

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available to use

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after office

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. If you want to reach out about

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letter, you can contact me using

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email address.

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task achievement

Consider providing more specific details about the impact of the problems on users, such as any examples of delays or incidents.

coherence and cohesion

Try to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for better clarity.

coherence and cohesion

Improve formal tone in the greeting and closing for a more professional approach.

task achievement

You have identified specific issues clearly, which is great for task achievement.

task achievement

Your suggestions are practical and thoughtful, demonstrating engagement with the topic.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

234 words

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