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There are lot of countries where more money is being spent on vehicles in the towns. It is believed that system of transportation is one of the main part of country`s economy.

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There are
lot
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 of countries where more money is being spent on vehicles in the towns. It is believed that
system
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the system
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 of transportation is
one
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 of the main
part
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parts
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 of
country`s
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the country`s
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 economy. There is a lot of transportation
that is
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 being developed.
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: Buses and taxi cars which are run on electricity, public bicycles which
easy
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 to use or high-speed trains which are getting more and more popular nowadays. Let`s focus on the public
bikes
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. Global warming is
one
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 of the current problems of our world, so
one
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 of
ways
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the ways
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 to stop the process is switching to
the
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apply
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pure energy.
The
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Bikes
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bikes
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 are considered to be the best way of harmless transit , and that
the
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is the
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 reason why it is being evolved in advanced countries. Turn to some
of
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apply
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two-wheelers proms are availability and universality. By
the
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availability I mean, that the production is much
more
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cheaper and bigger
comparing
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 with other transport productions.
Moreover
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, there are many places where public
bikes
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 can be organized, which makes it very comfortable to ride around a city. It would be useful for most
of
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people, especially for delivery workers and students.
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hand
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hand,
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bikes
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 have a few cons as
one
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 single-season relevance and property damages. Bicycles are considered to be summer transport
,
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 because they are not intended to be driven in bad weather.
As well as
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 that damages could be caused by drivers and thieves,
as a
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result
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 it may cost
lot
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a lot
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 of money
on repairing
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to repair
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 many
bikes
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 each season. In conclusion, many countries are considered to invest more
on
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in
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system
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a system
the system
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 of transit in cities nowadays.

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task achievement
Make sure to have a clear thesis statement in the introduction that states your main argument or position on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph logically flows to the next, using linking words or phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
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Expand on your examples and provide more explanation on how they support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Be cautious with grammar and structure; for instance, make sure the verb forms and articles are used correctly (e.g., use 'a lot of' instead of 'lot of', and 'the main parts' instead of 'the main part').
content
The topic of public transportation and its economic impact is relevant and clearly stated, which sets a good foundation for your essay.
content
You provide specific examples of transportation methods, such as public bicycles and electric buses, which enhances the discussion and shows an understanding of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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