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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information about the police
budget
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 sources in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, including contributions from the national government, local taxes, and other sources
such
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 as grants. The pie charts illustrate how
this
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budget
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 was distributed across three categories: salaries for officers and staff, technology, and buildings and transport.
Overall
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, the total police
budget
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 increased moderately from 2017 to 2018, with salaries remaining the largest expenditure.
However
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,
while
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 funding increased, there was a shift in how the money was allocated, particularly in technology. Regarding
budget
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 allocation, the national government provided the largest share of funding, rising slightly from £175.5
million
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 in 2017 to £177.8
million
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 in 2018. The most significant increase came from local taxes, which rose from £91.2
million
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 to £102.3
million
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. Other sources,
such
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 as grants, experienced a marginal increase from £38
million
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 to £38.5
million
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.
As a result
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, the total
budget
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 grew from £304.7
million
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 to £318.6
million
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 over the two years. In terms of spending distribution, officers’ and staff salaries accounted for the highest proportion of the
budget
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 in both years,
although
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 it decreased from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018. Expenditure on technology nearly doubled from 8% to 14%,
while
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 spending on buildings and transport remained unchanged at 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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