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When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we think we like them or not. Is it a good thing or bad thing?

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Humans generally have a tendency toward meeting and socializing with new
people
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. Some subconscious assumptions
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 promptly when we meet someone for the
first
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 time and whether we like them or not. I believe
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this assumption
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 mostly yields negative and misleading results that may prevent bonds leading to potential improvement opportunities in career fields and
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 relationships.
First
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 and foremost, meeting new
people
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 and realizing the ones helpful for business co-operations
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 essential.
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 prompt decisions must not be made on liking
people
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 because it may prevent real helpful connections in future meetings .As the saying goes, "
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 me your network I will tell
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 net worth", careers improve with meeting potential new
people
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.
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 it is a bad thing to guess someone’s character and true
potentials
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 in
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first
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 meeting.
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 to business fields, judging someone on the
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 date leads to misleading feelings that
prevents
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 healthy relationships that are bonding based on
true
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 understanding
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 characters. To illustrate better, a psychological study shows that love at
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 sight does not exist actually and emotional bond requires
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 cognition of real matching between partners. In conclusion,
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 is an absolutely negative view to like or dislike someone based on
first
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 impressions. Business meetings are one area where each side
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 to trust and recognize
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each other in
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 run and emotional bonds
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 require effort and recognition to
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 in a healthy manner.
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 decisions must not be made based
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 viewpoint.

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grammar
There are some grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrases in your writing. For example, "assumptions are make" should be "assumptions are made." It's important to proofread for such errors before submission. Additionally, try varying your sentence structure for better flow.
development
While your main points are relevant, they could be developed further. Consider adding more detail or examples to strengthen your arguments, particularly in how first impressions can impact relationships.
coherence
Ensure that your paragraphs are more clearly defined. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, and you should use transition words to help the reader follow your argument more easily.
content
You present a clear opinion on the topic and support it with relevant arguments.
structure
Your introduction sets the stage well for your discussion, highlighting the tendency of humans to make quick judgments.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • first impression
  • initial judgment
  • stereotypes
  • assess
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • appearance
  • facade
  • misjudgments
  • unfair judgments
  • decision-making process
  • social situation
  • character
  • repeated interactions
  • open-mindedness
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