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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph represents the joblessness index of the US and
Japan
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 in the time period from
March
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 1993 to
March
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 1999. The vertical axis showcases the percentage of labour power, and the horizontal one demonstrates the time period. In
March
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 of 1993,
Japan
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 and the United States had a massive difference in the level of employment, with approximately 2.3 and 7.0 respectively.
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, in 2 years the workforce index of the US dropped to roughly 5.5,
while
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 in
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 the situation was more positive with the employment rate increasing to 3.5. Both lines showed constant changes during the whole period. US line showed a negligible, but continuous downward trend.
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,
Japan
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also
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 had consistent movement upward. In early 1999, both lines met at the same point with a power force index of 4.5. In the 6 years, the United States’ employment level significantly dropped from 7.0 in
March
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 of 1993 to 4.1 in
March
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 1999. Oppositely,
Japan
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’s situation ameliorated from 2.3 in 1993 to 4.7 in 1999.

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