Traditionally, zoos are considered a sanctuary for endangered species, yet some of them are notorious for being cruel to animals. Do the advantages of zoos outweigh its disadvantages?

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important to help the endangered species in the
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the same time there are some disadvantages like changing the
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depressed, on the other
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help educate people about the beauty and important of the nature and the
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so they can help
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friendly to animals.

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Make sure each point you make is clearly linked to your argument. Use clear topic sentences and transitions between paragraphs to improve the overall flow of your essay.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. For example, mention particular endangered species or specific educational programs that zoos offer to enhance your argument.
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You introduced the importance of zoos for endangered species and highlighted key ideas about education and environmental conservation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sanctuary
  • endangered species
  • breeding programs
  • population stability
  • natural habitats
  • conservation efforts
  • scientific research
  • veterinary medicine
  • animal behavior
  • ethical
  • animal welfare
  • confinement
  • commercial interests
  • human entertainment
  • alternative methods
  • virtual reality experiences
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