Traditionally, zoos are considered a sanctuary for endangered species, yet some of them are notorious for being cruel to animals. Do the advantages of zoos outweigh its disadvantages?
the same time there are some disadvantages like changing the
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help educate people about the beauty and important of the nature and the
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so they can help
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friendly to animals.
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each point you make is clearly linked to your argument. Use clear topic sentences and transitions between paragraphs to improve the overall flow of your essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For example, mention particular endangered species or specific educational programs that zoos offer to enhance your argument.
task achievement
You introduced the importance of zoos for endangered species and highlighted key ideas about education and environmental conservation.
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