Some people say that the best way to reduce crime is by using prison sentences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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sentences.Based on what the

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to prohibit them from offending again.

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, can have less harsh

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the

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prison

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conviction but can not be considered as The best option for any kind of

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mental health,we can consider other

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for

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and prevent them from

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committing

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task achievement

Try to clarify your main argument in the introduction, explicitly stating your opinion about the effectiveness of prison sentences in reducing crime.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure smoother transitions between points in your paragraphs to improve overall coherence. Indicating how one point relates to another helps the reader follow your argument more easily.

task achievement

You have presented a balanced view on the topic by discussing both violent and petty crimes, which is a good approach to show critical thinking.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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Some people say that the best way to reduce crime is by using prison sentences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your opinion

You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter -describe the situation -explain why you cannot continue at this time -say what action you would like to take

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In many countries it is mandatory for school children to wear uniforms. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.