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1)The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1)The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 it shows the difference in temperature, sunrise, and sunset from 28th to 30th December between
London
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, UK and
Sydney
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, Australia.
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, as summarized in the two data tables,
London
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 has experienced higher
temperatures
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 compared to
Sydney
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.
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, it had a narrower temperature range
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 to
Sydney
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, which had considerably more temperature variation.
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,
London
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 has a later sunrise and earlier sunset compared to
Sydney
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. In
London
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,
temperatures
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 varied from 3
°C
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 to 13
°C
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, with sunrises around 08:05 and 8:06, and sunset occurring within 15:57 and 15:59. Meanwhile, in
Sydney
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temperatures
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 ranged from 17
°C
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 to 31
°C
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, with sunrises between 05:45 and 5:46, and sunsets at 20:06 and 20:07. As shown in the data table, it is evident that
Sydney
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 is warmer than
London
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 during the period described.
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 comparisons reveal that
London
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 has shorter days, cooler, and steady
temperatures
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, reaching a high of 13
°C
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 on Saturday, December 29th. Notwithstanding,
Sydney
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, has longer days, warmer, and variable
temperatures
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, peaking at 31
°C
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 on Sunday, December 30th.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, temperatures, °c with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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