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The bar chart illustrates the number of travelers to Australia from five different countries in January 2019 and January 2020.

The bar chart illustrates the number of travelers to Australia from five different countries in January 2019 and January 2020.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
travelers
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travellers
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 to Australia from five different countries in
January
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 2019 and
January
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 2020. The number of tourists in
January
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 2020 is generally higher than
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January
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in January
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 2019 except for tourists from
UK
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the UK
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. Explorers from China got the highest number with 50,000. in 2020, an increase
around
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of around
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 15,000
than
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from
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a
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the
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 year before. The second highest
visitors
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number of visitors
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is
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are
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 from New Zealand. We can see that
Uk
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UK
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 and US journeyers who visit Australia at a range
18,000
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of 18,000
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 as India tourists, the least one, are only 10,000.

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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words january with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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