the diagram shows the process of making coffe

the diagram shows the process of making coffe
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The diagram illustrates the stages involved in
a
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coffee production which consists of 11 distinct stages.
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, it is evident that the process commences with manual
labor
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and later machinery for most of the steps.
Initially
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, coffee beans are hand-picked from trees by local farmers and left to dry under natural sunlight,
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is followed by roasting them in a machine.
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, the temperature is dropped and the roasted beans are cooled quickly using a freezer. After cooling, they are ground by hand until they become a fine powder.
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, workers combined them with hot water and stirred, and after a
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, the mixture
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strained. The next four phases of
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process are freezing the previous mixture,followed by grinding them.
Afterward
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, they put it into
vacuum
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as
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dry them and to make sure that there is no water left.
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, the coffee granules are packed into jars ,making them ready for distribution and sale.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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