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The pie charts show the size of classes ion primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010.

The pie charts show the size of classes ion primary schools in four states in Australia in 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the distribution of primary school class sizes across four Australian states and territories in 2010.
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, medium-sized
classes
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 of 21-25
students
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 were predominant in most regions, with the Australian Capital Territory (
ACT
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) having the highest proportion of these
classes
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. Very large
classes
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 of over 30
students
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 were relatively uncommon across all four regions,
while
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 the distribution of smaller
classes
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 varied considerably between territories. In the
ACT
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, over half (51%) of all primary school
classes
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 contained 21-25
students
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, representing the highest percentage in
this
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 category among all regions.
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 territory
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 had the lowest proportion of large
classes
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, with only 10% having 26-30
students
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 and a mere 1% exceeding 30
students
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.
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, the
ACT
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 had the highest percentage (38%) of small
classes
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 with 20 or fewer
students
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. Western Australia showed a comparable pattern, with 42% of
classes
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 falling in the 21-25 student range, though it had a significantly higher proportion of larger
classes
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 (27% with 26-30
students
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 and 5% with over 30
students
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).
In contrast
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, New South Wales and South Australia had more evenly distributed class sizes across the smaller categories, with both states showing substantial proportions of
classes
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 with 26-30
students
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 (33% and 28% respectively). South Australia had the highest percentage of
classes
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 with 20 or fewer
students
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 (36%) outside the
ACT
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words classes, students, act with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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