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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their own countries. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to change negative attitudes?

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International
tourism
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 is one of the biggest industries that help the economy grow.
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, many
people
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 believe that it has bad effects on their countries. There are different reasons why they think so, but there are
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 ways to change their mind. One big reason for negative attitudes to international
tourism
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 is damage to the environment.
Tourists
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 often throw a lot of trash, and some natural places become dirty.
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, beaches and mountains can be full of plastic and other waste because of too many visitors. Another reason is overcrowding. Many tourist places become too full of
people
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, making life hard for locals. Prices for food, houses and transport go up, and local
people
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 may not have enough money for basic needs. Cultural differences are
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 an important reason. Some
tourists
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 do not respect local traditions.
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, in some countries,
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 must dress in a modest way, but some
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 ignore
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 rule.
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 can make local
people
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 feel uncomfortable or even angry. Some
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 behave
bad
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, like drinking too much alcohol in public or making a lot of noise, and
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 creates a bad opinion about them. To change these negative attitudes, governments and businesses need to do something. One solution is to support responsible
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.
Tourists
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 should learn about local culture and how to protect nature. Airports, hotels and travel agencies can give information on how to behave well in another country. Another solution is to make stronger laws to protect local
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.
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, governments can limit the number of visitors to popular places or give big fines for throwing trash.
Tourism
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 should
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 give benefits to local
people
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. More jobs in
tourism
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 should be for locals, and money from
tourism
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 should help to build roads, public transport and hospitals.
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 way, locals can see the good side of
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 and feel that it helps their country. In conclusion, international
tourism
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 has some bad effects, but we can make it better. By supporting responsible
tourism
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, making better laws and making sure that local
people
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 get benefits, we can change negative attitudes and make
tourism
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 good for everyone.

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The essay addresses the topic well and presents valid arguments against international tourism.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • local ecosystems
  • ecological damage
  • cultural erosion
  • dilution of local cultures
  • global culture
  • economic disparities
  • local communities
  • foreign investors
  • overcrowding
  • quality of life
  • infrastructure
  • sustainable tourism
  • eco-friendly practices
  • community-based tourism
  • cultural preservation
  • economic redistribution
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