You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

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Dear Laura. I hope
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you are doing well today. You were curious to learn news in my
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.
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, I decided to tell you about that. Today in my
country
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is
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disturbances and
people
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are outside in the street. Because authorities say that, we will not consider to get in
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the europian
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europian union
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European Union
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anymore, because of their laws. So
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want to get
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the europian
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europian union
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and
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want to maintain their
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of
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the
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, because
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the Russian
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government
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to impact
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the
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and
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this
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country
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another colony.
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, Dagestan and
Chechnian
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Chechnya
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Russian colonies.
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Furthermore
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were beaten. Because of their opinions, during the manifest in the streets. I strongly disagree
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and believe, authorities could be
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and let
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to manifesting
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their opinions outside the homes,
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show
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the
people
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outsied
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outside
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's point of view.
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is dreadful
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from the authorities for me. Best Regards. Harry

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coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your letter more clearly by using distinct paragraphs for each point.
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Make sure to express your thoughts using complete sentences, and clarify your opinions to avoid confusion.
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Consider improving formal language and tone by avoiding informal phrases like 'doing well today'.
positive
You provided relevant information about the news story and its significance to the citizens.
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You shared your personal opinion, which adds a nice personal touch to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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