Some people say History is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
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plays an instrumental role in our life, because it's knowledge about
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, countries or other things.
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, most students and rarely adults don't know about it. In
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essay, it will be discussed
firstly
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why it is important to know 
history
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,
then
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added
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why
history
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is significant for scientists'
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,
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finally
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and finally
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it will be excellent
,
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if everyone
know
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history
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the history
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about
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his\her
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his
country.
To begin
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with,
history
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is
subject
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a subject
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that everyone must know. Mainly
people
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study
this
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subject at school because
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illustrate
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illustrates
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for us a lot of
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moments
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from the past ages.
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,
this
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information may be used by societies.
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,
while
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communities study
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as a result
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of
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they cannot
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make
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some mistakes that have done.
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, politicians use many material from
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for making
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decision
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decisions
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which can make
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the county
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county
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country
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or other things better in the future. That's why most politicians and other
people
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learn
history
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. Mostly scientists like learning
history
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for knowing
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the truth.
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the other hand, it
assist
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them to have outstanding
researches
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. Some scientists like to copy ancient technology and
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it.
This
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manipulation with old technologies
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to us
understanding
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how ancient
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lived. All of
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this
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these
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things show how
scientist
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scientists
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improving our future, and why they are learning
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apply
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history
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.
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, some gadgets which we have can be the best evidence. In conclusion, now, we must study histories at least about our country.
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, if everyone
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learning a lot of facts from
history
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, they might get
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a chance
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to have a good job in the future and be intelligent.

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task achievement
Clarify and develop your main points further to provide a stronger argument. Make sure that each paragraph clearly links back to your thesis and contributes to your overall argument.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of your essay by using clearer topic sentences and logical transitions between ideas to help guide the reader through your argument.
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Expand your examples to illustrate your points more effectively. Providing more specific instances would strengthen your argument and make it more compelling.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and presents a balanced discussion of both views regarding the importance of history and other subjects.
coherence and cohesion
You have structured your essay into clear paragraphs, which is important for readability and organization.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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