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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line diagram indicates the calculation of
visitors
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touristing
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visiting
 a specific Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the popularity of
this
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 isolated
island
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 was getting more popular with significant increase
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while
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during
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 these seven years.
Moreover
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, the
prevelant
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prominent
 trend of staying on
cruise
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a cruise
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 surpassed the
visitors
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 preferring to
take
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apply
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rest on the
island
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 with an intersection
during
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in
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 2015.
To begin
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 with, the
number of
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apply
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population
whch
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which
 approximately reached one million
at
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in
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 2017, had an obvious growth
as
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of
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 three and half times as than the 2010 period.
Besides
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of
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apply
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that, the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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, enjoying relaxing on the
island
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, immediately soared up by 2011,
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however
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however,
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 it
kept
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maintained
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 a plain
pleateu
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pleated
plate
plateau
 with one and
half
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a half
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 million
during
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from
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 2013 to 2015, and slightly
fluctuacted
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fluctuated
fluctuates
 with 25
thousands
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thousand
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 decrease
at
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apply
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2015 in the end.
Look
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Looking
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 at the rest of
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the figure
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figure
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figures
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,
visitors
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chosing
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choosing
taking
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to take
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 the cruise,
although
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 it was quite not famous before 2012 with merely fifty
thousands
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thousand
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 people, it dramatically skyrocketed after 2013, and reached two million
visitors
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in
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at
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 the end
at
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of
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 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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