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The pie chart shows how people use four modes of transport in the city of Edmonton,as well as how the table shows data from five different driving reasons.

The pie chart shows how people use four modes of transport in the city of Edmonton,as well as how the table shows data from five different driving reasons.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of four different modes of transportation used in the city of Edmonton. The table
also
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 displays five reasons why
people
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 drive.
Overall
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, the most common mode of transportation was by
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cars
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car
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, followed by LRT, whilst the number of
people
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transport
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transported
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 by buses and taxis was much lower. The majority of
people
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 drove because they commuted to work. Businesses and taking children to school were
also
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 the main reasons
of
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for
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 driving. Almost
a
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apply
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half of the
people
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 selected
cars
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 as a mode
to
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of
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 transport
while
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 LRT was
also
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 popular with a
slight
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slightly
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 lower number at 35%.
In contrast
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, buses and taxis were much less popular, each accounted for only 10%, making these two modes the least popular groups. 55% of
people
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 in the city of Edmonton
drove
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drive
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cars
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 because of commuting to work, making it the primary reason
of
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for
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 using
cars
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.
While
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 both businesses and taking children to school gained 45% and 40% respectively, shopping and leisure activities were answered by only 15% of
people
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 each.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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