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In some contries, more and more people are becoming interestd in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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 many individuals are willing to find
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knowledge
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history
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 of the place where they spend
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their
 time. people are
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eager
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 the reasons for doing
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individuals
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collect
these information
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.
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, humans are trying to find more
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most time more
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like
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personal
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into
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history
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connection
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 so that they can feel safe there.
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 the home or the land , even in the house
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 picture people are now using the picture with whom they are attached. or precious things which they have got from
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their
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relationships
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 with the people with
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whom
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 the things with
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which they
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 can build
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. There are many websites and platforms
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where
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past
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a
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of
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artifical
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artificial
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intelligence
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find our
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different
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preference
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information
where
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about where
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history
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the place
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the use
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 and social media makes it
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easier
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find
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 the details of
history
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 and helps us to make attchments
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 our land , and home.

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task achievement
Your introduction presents the topic but lacks clarity. Ensure that your thesis statement clearly outlines what you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking your ideas into clearer paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a specific point related to your main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Many sentences contain spelling errors and grammatical mistakes. Proofread your work to correct these issues and improve readability.
task achievement
You show enthusiasm about the topic, indicating that it is relevant and interesting to you.
coherence and cohesion
The idea of using social media and the internet as research tools is a modern approach and adds depth to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heritage
  • cultural significance
  • personal connection
  • community narrative
  • emotional attachment
  • historical roots
  • online resources
  • archives
  • real estate
  • property value
  • influence
  • research
  • discover
  • explore
  • narrative
  • investigation
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