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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of Australian products that were exported to four different countries from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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,
while
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Japan
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 was the dominant country at the beginning, its
number
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declinded
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declined
decline
 dramatically.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
China
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 started from the lowest point,
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 figure sharply surged, making
China
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 the top destination in the final periods, surpassing
Japan
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 before 2010. The
number
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 of the US saw a fluctuation over the given years,
whereas
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 the percentage of
exports
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 with India remained almost the same.
Japan
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initially
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 accounted for more than 25% of Australian
exports
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, rapidly declining to around 20% in 1995 before experiencing a moderate decrease until the end.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
exports
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 with
China
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 stood at under 5% in 1990, it slightly went up to 5% in 2000 before seeing
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significant growth, reaching over 25% and overtaking
Japan
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.
This
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 made
China
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 the highest share among all
countires
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countries
.
Although
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 the US began with the second
higest
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highest
 percentage of
exports
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, a fluctuation was observed. India was at the same point as
China
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 in 1990;
however
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, the Indian
number
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 remained the same until 2000. It
then
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 moderately grew to peak at approximately 7%, overtaking the US in 2010, before dropping down, making India the lowest
number
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 of
exports
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, number, china, exports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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