There is a view that government should provide the house for those who can not afford it?

Some
people
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thinks
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that
government
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the government
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must ensure the
house
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for homeless and needy individuals. İn my opinion,
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agree
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this
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idea because there are bad and good parts. From my perspective, there are good
part
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more than bad
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. I think the
country
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ought to provide
the
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apply
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house
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houses
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for
homeless
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the homeless
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,
as well as
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to
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for
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meager
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meagre
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people
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. They are folk of
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country
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, when they have a problem the polity must help them. İn the same way, poor
family
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families
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need a
home
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, they earn less cash
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therefore
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and therefore
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can not buy a flat. They rent a small
home
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and
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there, but sometimes when doesn't have enough money they are forced to
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in shelter
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shelter
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and shacks. So, in my opinion, no one should be homeless.
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that, polity can
do
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other concession
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for them. When it
happen
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, folk are satisfied
from
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administration
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.
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, social problems decrease and all
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is good for the
country
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. İf
government
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can not insure a
house
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to
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all of them, can do
mortgage
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mortgages
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and special
discount
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discounts
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for poor humans. İn that case,
people
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don't pay cash for hire, they pay
like
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rent, but in the
end
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will get
free
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flat. Many countries do
such
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.
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, when
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country
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a country
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ensure
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ensures
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a
home
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them
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. Some
human
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humans
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can
use
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abuse that.
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can happen in several ways.
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, someone may sell the
house
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given to them and these
use
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for other things.
And some
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can appear homeless by
change
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a document of
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house
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the house
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to another
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people's
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person's
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name. I
belive
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believe
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these occasions will happen.
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, ı think
government
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the government
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ought to
analysis
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these things and
then
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secure a
home
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for
who
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those who
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are
meager
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meagre
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.

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task achievement
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely and effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your essay for grammatical errors and spelling mistakes before submission.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly into distinct paragraphs to improve the overall structure.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for task response.
task achievement
You included relevant points about the issues of homelessness and government assistance, showing your understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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