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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe that professional like doctors and engineers , should be required to work in the country where they training .Other believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish . discuss both side and give your opinion .

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Professional
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The professional
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class
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 of each
country
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 is an
importatnt
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important
 part of each
country
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 to contribute in building and shaping a community in
well-direction
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a well-direction
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 .Training medical
doctor
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doctors
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 or engineers has been
burn
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burning
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 a huge amount of time and resources to build them
effective
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, effective
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 individuals ,so ,
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the iimagitration
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iimagitration
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imagination
 of
professional
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a professional
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class
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 of each
country
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 must
has
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 done based on specific rules and protocols that their
immagiration
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immigration
imagination
 will bring adequate achievement for the
origin
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country
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 and don not
abuse
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an abuse
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 of the destination as well . Training at higher academic levels will occupy
opportinuities
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opportunities
 for the local residents as well and need more special
equipments
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equipment
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 and professors to teach them ,
for example
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 , building a professional lab has
been
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spent more resources to hire scientists and students to do experiments ,so , if there is no sensible result for the destination
country
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 as well , they will hurt in
this
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 way ,
however
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,
iimagiration
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imagination
immigration
 without specific plan and motivation of professional
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 of
origin
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country
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 will create more tension in their personal life and put heavy weight on their
origin
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country
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 , because
average
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the average
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 level of services does not need advanced lab , hospital or
equipments
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equipment
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 for engineers ,but ,
professional
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the professional
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class
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 have more
amitious
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ambitious
 and
pattion
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passion
 to dedicate their life to achieve higher skills to apply in their job . I think if the
origin
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 and
desitination
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destination
country
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 have a common project to collaborate ,
this
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 type of
immagiration
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immigration
imagination
 is more
favorable
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favourable
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 for both
side
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sides
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,
neverthless
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nevertheless
, professional could
iimagirate
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immigrate
 for
rest
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the rest
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 of
life
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their life
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 in another part of
world
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the world
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 if they gave own loan as national duties to the
home-
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home country
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country
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task achievement
The introduction could clearly state the topic and the essay's purpose. Consider rephrasing for clarity and directness.
coherence and cohesion
Transitions between paragraphs could be improved to enhance the flow of ideas. Ensure each paragraph logically follows the previous one.
coherence and cohesion
Check spelling errors (e.g. 'importatnt' should be 'important', 'iimagitration' should be 'immigration', and 'desitination' should be 'destination'). These can distract the reader.
task achievement
You've presented both sides of the argument, which is vital for a balanced discussion.
task achievement
The essay contains some relevant examples regarding the training of professionals and the needs of the home and host countries.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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