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These days, many university courses are offered through the internet. Some people think that online teaching has more advantages than conventional classroom teaching or lectures, while others claim that there are significant disadvantages. Do the benefit of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, there are many online
courses
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 offered by colleges . Some claim that those
courses
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 are more beneficial than the traditional learning system,
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 that the drawbacks of
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online
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also
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 between the advantages and the
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disadvantages
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 of online
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 . To
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begin
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people who
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a university
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 countries, by using technology they can join any online
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courses
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by
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 only one click which is helpful and easy. Another positive impact is learning by using
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internet
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 is much cheaper
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 the fact that
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doesn't
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 need to pay for petrol or the other things that they should pay for it if they are attending
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normal classes. Now, let us turn to the disadvantages of the online classes.
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, some
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 the class
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while
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 without being focused
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there
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 teachers .
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, many
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 find it easier to cheat in
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their
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 exams or assignments because no one can see what they are doing . Those negative effects can be solved by the right
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 from the universities that
offers
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 those online
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.
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, the pros of online
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makes
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the
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that
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students
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 spend less and
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 them to learn from any place over the world, which makes education easier. The benefits can
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outweigh
outwigh
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outweigh
 the drawbacks

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grammar
Make sure to proofread your essay for grammatical errors and typos. For example, 'universities' should be 'university', and 'there' should be 'their' in several instances.
structure
Ensure your essay has a clear thesis statement in the introduction that outlines your main argument regarding online courses. This will help guide your discussion.
content
Enhance the development of your ideas by providing more specific examples or evidence to support your points, particularly in the advantages and disadvantages sections.
content
You present a balanced view by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of online courses, which is essential for addressing the prompt effectively.
coherence
Your essay follows a logical structure with distinct paragraphs focusing on different aspects of the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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