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Some say that todays life is better than it will be in the future; others disagree and say that in the future life will be better than now. Discuss, and include your own opinion

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Change is the only constant thing in the world.
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, a portion of people believe that
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 time is going to be better than now,
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, a group of individuals
argues
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 that
,
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current
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the current
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 timeline is better than
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the future
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. As far as I am concerned, I support the
later
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 view, and my position will be completely justified in the following paragraphs.
World
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The world
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 is altering in a fast-paced way, and sometimes the change is often unacceptable. To specify, the proportion of pollutants is skyrocketing in the atmosphere, leading to
give
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a
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 birth
to
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 new diseases.
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this
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catashtrophic
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catastrophic
 crisis, not only animals are suffering
as well as
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extincting
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extinction
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eco-systems
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ecosystems
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, but humans are facing tremendous challenges.
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, as per the National Insitute of India, Delhi
city
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in
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India is affected by hazardous
chemical
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chemicals
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 in the air, leading citizens to leave the urban area for their safety.
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 is to say, there is not a single
posibility
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possibility
 for
this
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 problem to stop,
therefore
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, it is going to be worse after some decades, making living creatures
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hardly survive afterwards.
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,
population
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the population
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 is
ever rising
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, mainly
contibuting
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contributing
continuing
unemployment
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. To clarify, people are not able to find
a work
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work
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in the growing
compitive
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competitive
 job market. It can be predicted that people will not be able to get a well-paying job, even though they
are having
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 a valuable skillset and experience.
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,
American
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an American
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 research organization has published a research paper recently, which states,
there
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that there
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 is a
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of
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that
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 55% of
total
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the total
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 worldwide population will
loose
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 their job,
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 automatization and scarcity of employment opportunities. It will make future
generation
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to
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go
thorough
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through
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 tough times for their family.
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, increasing pollution and population on a global scale will create several challenges to survive for our
nexet
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next
 generation. So, it is easy to say that
current
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the current
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 time is
preferable
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the preferable
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 time to live.

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task achievement
Clarify your position in the introduction by providing a clearer thesis statement. Consider rephrasing "I support the later view" to make your stance more explicit.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs have a clear topic sentence that states the main idea of the paragraph. This will help improve the logical structure of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas, as some words are repeated. For example, instead of using "population" multiple times, consider synonyms such as "inhabitants" or "citizens".
coherence and cohesion
Double-check your grammar and spelling, as there are several typos and errors (e.g., "catashtrophic", "insitute", "posibility", "contibuting"). This can impact your overall score.
task achievement
Expand on your conclusion to summarize the main arguments more comprehensively. A stronger conclusion reaffirms your position and ties together the essay’s points smoothly.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples, which support your arguments effectively, such as the pollution crisis in Delhi and unemployment due to automatization.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates an awareness of current global issues, which adds depth to your discussion on the future vs present debate.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • medical breakthroughs
  • quality of life
  • environmental challenges
  • climate change
  • resource depletion
  • global connectivity
  • cultural understanding
  • global problems
  • international cooperation
  • political instability
  • optimism
  • inequality
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