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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie chart give some data about the
police
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budget
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 for 2017 and 2018 in a specific region in the UK.
Moreover
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, the table indicates that the
money
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 came from the National Government, Local Taxes, and other sources
while
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 the pie charts display that the finances were spent on Salaries, Technology, Buildings and transport.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
police
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budget
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 was mostly provided by the National Government in both years in England, and the
money
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 was mainly spent on officers and staff incomes. The main provider of the
police
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budget
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 was the National Government in both 2017 and 2018 with 175.5 and 177.8
million
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pounds
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, respectively.
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, the source of 91.2
million
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pounds
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 of the
money
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 was Local Taxes in 2017,
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,
this
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 amount increased to 102.3
million
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pounds
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 in 2018.
Furthermore
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, other sources provided roughly 38
million
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pounds
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 of
police
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 finances in 2017 and 2018. So, the total proportion of
money
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 became 304.7
million
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pounds
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 in 2017, and about 10
million
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pounds
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 more in 2018. The greatest amount of
money
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 was spent on officer's and worker's incomes with 75 per
cent
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 and 69 per
cent
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 in 2017 and 2018, respectively in Great Britain.
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, only 17 per
cent
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 of the
budget
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 was spent on Buildings and transport in 2017 and 2018.
In addition
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, 8 per
cent
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 of the
police
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 finances was spent on Technology in 2017, and
this
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 number approximately doubled in 2018 in the UK.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, million, pounds, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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