Many economically developed countries give economic support to poorer regions, although there may be benefits, some critics say that this policy does more harm than good. Discuss both side of arguments.

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Many economically developed

countries

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often provide financial

aids

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aid

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to under-developed

countries

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, but some think that it can lead to

disadvantage

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disadvantages

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rather than benefits.

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essay thinks that

economical

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economic

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helps

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can be extremely useful to enhance the availability of medicine and education

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independence and extremely high

taxtation

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taxation

can be devastating to

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a residence

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residence

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in poorer

countries

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. Economically developed

countries

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can invest funds

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healthcare and education fields in order to improve

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the accesiblility

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accesiblility

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accessibility

of healthcare services and

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wide

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a wide

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variety of schools to grow more intelligent students for local citizens.

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it can be beneficial for

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task achievement

Ensure consistent use of terminology (e.g., 'economic support' vs. 'financial aids'). Clarify the types of advantages and disadvantages more explicitly.

coherence and cohesion

Enhance logical flow by linking ideas and paragraphs more clearly. Use transitional phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.

task achievement

Expand on your arguments by providing specific examples and elaborating on how economic aid impacts healthcare and education outcomes.

task achievement

The essay presents both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction clearly states the topic and introduces the main points that will be discussed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

94 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that the academic success of students depends on good teachers at schools. Others think that it depends on the attitude and determination of the students. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that it is too difficult for poor people or people from rural areas to go to university. So that the universities should make it especially easy for them. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

While studying some students take weekend or evening jobs to help with expenditure. How do you feel about this? What are the drawbacks and benefits of such a decision? What is your view? Give reasons for your answer.

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