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The graph below compares the number of visitors to two new music sites on the web. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares the number of visitors to two new music sites on the web. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the difference between
Music
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choice
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 and
pop
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parade
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 in fifteen days of
visitor
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 numbers on their website. The data shows,
in
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on
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the
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apply
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day
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 one the number of
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visitor
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visitors
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 between
Music
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choice
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Choice
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 and
Pop
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parade
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quite
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is quite
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contrats
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different
.
Visitors
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of
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to
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pop
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the pop
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parade
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 reached 120 people and for
Music
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choice
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 Only reached 40 people.
Moreover
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visitor
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visitors
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of
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to
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pop
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the pop
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parade
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quite
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were quite
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 steady until
day
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 three and fell
down
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apply
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dramatically
in
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on
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day
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 five and the following days and reached the
buttom
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bottom
in
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on
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day
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 seven,
approximately
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with approximately
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 reached 26
visitors
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.
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,
in
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on
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day
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 three
music
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 the
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visitor
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visitors
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 of
music
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choice
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 increased to 60 Which was better than the
day
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 one and
become
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became
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 steady until
day
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 eleven. On the
last
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day
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, both
music
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choice
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 and
pop
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parade
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significantly
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were significantly
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 different
of
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in
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visitor
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number
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numbers
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.
Whereas
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,
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pop
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the pop
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parade
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 had reached a lot of
visitors
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 Which was 170.
However
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,
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music
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the music
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choice
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 only reached 70
visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words music, choice, pop, parade, visitor, day, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 6 times.
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