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+: The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry.

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The bar chart illustrates
unemployment
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 rates among women in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. We can see from the graph that
female
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the female
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unemployment
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rate
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 in England,
Wales
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and Wales
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 in 2013 and 2014
is
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was
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 almost the same. But in Scotland,
Northern
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and Northern
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 Ireland, the
woman’s
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women’s
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unemployment
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rate
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 in 2013 and 2014 is slightly different. Among the graphs, England had the highest female
unemployment
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rate
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, reaching 6.8% in 2013 and
decreased
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decreasing
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 to 6.5% in 2014,
while
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 Northern Ireland had the lowest
unemployment
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rate
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 among women, standing at 5.6% in 2013,
whereas
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 in 2014, it dropped to 4.6%. In general,
woman’s
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women’s
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unemployment
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rate
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 minimally decreased in 2014 in each country of the United Kingdom.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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