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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring

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Dear Liza, I hope you are doing great. I have received your mail.
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, I am so happy reading the news that, you are planning to visit Mumbai for a couple of weeks to enjoy your March holidays. I will be excited to meet you. I will do my best to suggest to you the details you want for planning your holidays
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 as the accommodation and list of places. I would like to know your preference for what kind of accommodation you prefer to stay so that I can make a reservation before your arrival. There are many good hotels available which are
pocket friendly
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pocket-friendly
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 yet clean and spacious.
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, You wanted to know the places where you can experience the local food, shopping, and lifestyle of Indian people. So, here I would suggest you travel on the local commute
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 as by train and
rickshaws
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rickshaw
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 to visit nearby religious famous temples and monuments.
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 to that, you can plan to visit the famous cricket stadium, the film city set and
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,
Marine
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and Marine
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 Drive Beach. You can
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 have experience in street shopping and taste local food items. I hope
this
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 piece of information will be helpful to plan your holidays. I forgot to mention that you asked me what kind of clothes would you bring , Let me tell you that you should not carry any particular items to wear. Here, the weather is quite hot and dry so summer clothes will do better. I wish you the best wishes for your awaited vacation and
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, I hope to see you soon. Regards, Joan.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down longer sentences to improve clarity and readability.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain a consistent formatting style for clarity, such as the spacing of paragraphs and sections.
task achievement
When mentioning specific places (like the cricket stadium), it might be valuable to provide brief descriptions to enhance context.
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You demonstrated a warm tone and a friendly opening, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
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You provided a well-rounded set of suggestions regarding places to visit and things to do, showcasing local culture.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • cultural events
  • outdoor activities
  • regional cuisine
  • seasonal weather
  • suitable clothing
  • local recommendations
  • hospitality
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