Some people believe that schools should focus more on teaching practical skills rather than theoretical knowledge. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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about
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schools
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should
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concentrate
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students'
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pragmatic talents rather than their theoretical knowledge.
Although
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children's knowledge is important, I believe
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their
practical skills can be
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useful
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future so
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is the best way of preparing students in
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. On the one hand,the importance of theory
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can not be
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overstated
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.These
lessons
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can considered as a good force for enhancing
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intellect
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in plenty
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of ways
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.
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,solving math and biology questions
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mind
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minds
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pressure which can elevate the
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portion of their brain. And the more
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part of
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improves, the more children
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address
their issues
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accurately
.
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,some of these theory
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extends
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studend's
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student's
students
knowledge about their
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environment
and themself.
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,biology
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help children
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learn
about their own and other
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bodies.
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,
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informations
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information
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how to behave
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own and
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living creatures more appropriately.
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,
schools
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should
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concentrate
on
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practical talents as much as their
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knowledge
database .Because some of their students are not good at
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theoretical
majors.So,Through
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way of balanced teaching, child's capabilities can be discovered and sophisticated for their future path of learning. Practical skills based on
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talents can aware them
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their field of
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interest
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students
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stop their
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journey
of learning after they graduate from high school.Most of these adolescents come from
schools
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that just push them to finish their mediocre curriculum.
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, if
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had focused on
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their
pragmatic skills and discovered them they would have
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their learning
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journey
by going to universities. In conclusion,practical
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lessons
are as
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apply
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important as
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theoretical
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.So in my way of thinking ,
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should fit both of these aspects of these learning areas in their schooling.

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Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, demonstrating an understanding of the complexity of the topic.
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You provide examples that illustrate your points, such as the role of biology lessons, which enhance the relevance of your essay.

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