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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles would be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In these
mordern
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modern
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help
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the help
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 of technology, all types of transport modes
has
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becoming
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become
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dirverless
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driverless
.I think that the advantages
outweight
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outweigh
 the
disadvanatges
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disadvantages
 because of more
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safety
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. On the one hand, there are several benefits of automated
vehicles
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, the most important advantage is safety. When people purchase automated
vehicles
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, the
overall
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 safety rate increases because these
vehicles
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 are equipped with inbuild systems that help prevent accidents.
Secondly
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,
peopel
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people
 can do multi-tasking
while
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 they are driving.
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 as they can attend online
meeting
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meetings
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 when they travelling or they can
also
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enjoyed
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 their
jurney
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journey
by
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 the help of
entertainmnet
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entertainment
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For example
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,
according to
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 one survey,
arround
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around
 40% of people nowadays prefer to buy an
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automatic car
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instaed
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instead
to
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 manually because they can do
multi tasking
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 and
enjoye thier
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enjoy their
 journey.
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, there are some
drawback
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drawbacks
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 which
is
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are
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 not as big as their
advanatges
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advantages
.
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 as, the employment
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ratio
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ration
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 will be decreased, Right now, most
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of
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auto-matives
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the auto-matives
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 facotories prefred to work with machines rather than
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workers
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worker
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workers
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 as
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it
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its
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costs
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cost
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costs
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friendly
freindly
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friendly
 and
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does
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do
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does
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 work
speedly
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faster
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compared
comapre
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compared
 to
human
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a human
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workers
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worker
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.
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, the development of driverless
vehicles
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 may lead to unemployment for drivers, causing them to lose their jobs.
Although
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this
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 advancement could lower the cost of transportation, it may disrupt job markets and lead to economic instability.For
instannce
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instance
,
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around
 30% of people, who
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woker
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worker
woken
 as
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the driver
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driver
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drivers
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 has become unemployed because of
advancemnet
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advancement
advancements
 in
vehicle
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the vehicle
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industries
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. In conclusion, as scientific advancements continue, cars, buses, and trucks will become driverless.
While
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this
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 transition presents both advantages and disadvantages, I believe that the benefits of driverless
vehicles
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 outweigh the drawbacks, as explained in the essay

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task achievement
Enhance the introduction by clearly outlining the main arguments. Consider revising phrasing such as 'In these modern era' to 'In today's modern era.'
coherence
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that ties back to the main argument. This will help strengthen coherence and cohesion.
coherence
Review sentence structures and avoid using run-on sentences. Shorter, clearer sentences can sometimes be more effective.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, stating that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, which is important for task achievement.
task achievement
The use of examples contributes to supporting your points, notably in discussing multitasking benefits.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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