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The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the United States of America's government
expenditure
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 on
research
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 from 1980 to 2008.
Overall
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,
expenditure
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 across all
research
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 topics followed an upward trend, with a notable exception in the category of other, which followed a downward trajectory. Over the
years
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, health consumed the most money when it comes to
research
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,
while
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 all other expenses are distributed relatively equally, with general science as the least
expenditure
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.
Firstly
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,
expenditure
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 in all
research
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 groups has increased over the
years
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. In 1980, health stood at about 8
billion
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dollars
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,
this
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 figure gradually rose over the
years
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,
then
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 reached a peak of 23
billion
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dollars
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 in 2004,
then
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 plummeted to 17
billion
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dollars
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 in 2008.
However
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, other
research
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 topics
such
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 as space, energy and general science maintained stable
expenditure
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 over the
years
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, at less than 10
billion
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dollars
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, with general science being at the bottom of spending at approximately 3
billion
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dollars
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 in 1980, rising to 5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2008.
In contrast
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,
while
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 all categories showed an increased trend in
expenditure
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, the group of others followed a decreased trend. In 1980,
this
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 group stood at 7
billion
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dollars
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, which
further
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 dropped to 5
billion
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dollars
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 in 1984. The amount spent on other
research
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 oscillated over the
years
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, falling to 5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2008.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, research, years, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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