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With the develop of the countries people are more living individually or with the small family members. Describe this case ? How this case can effect the society?

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Nowadays. With the development of the
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nation
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nations
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nations,
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people
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 are more likely to live alone or with their small
familly
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families
. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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coast
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apply
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people
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to
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live individually.
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, There are a number of
reason
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reasons
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. The first
most
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and most
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 important reason is
people
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become
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are
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 using
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the internet
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internet
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 more. So, they want to be alone and contact their family members by using phones or any other smart devices.
Secondly
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, with the
develop
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 of the
countries
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countries,
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 it's become more difficult to find a job. So,
people
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 need to find a job in a city other than the city their families live in .
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,
this
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 can
effect
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affect
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the
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apply
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society in several ways. One of the
way
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ways
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 that
people
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 living far from their families
cab
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can
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leads
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lead
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them
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apply
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to more
depress
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depression
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 and stress

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coherence and cohesion
Provide a clearer introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Expand your conclusion to summarize the main points made in the essay.
task achievement
Use more specific examples or details to support your ideas, particularly regarding the societal effects of living individually.
language use
Check your grammar and spelling, such as 'familly' (should be 'family') and 'effect' (should be 'affect').
task achievement
You have identified relevant reasons for the trend of living alone or with small families.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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