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The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two plans illustrate
predict
Correct word choice
and predict
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 the developments for Bunborough
village
Capitalize word
Village
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 from now to 2024.
Overall
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, the main differences are in 2024 the plan include
construction
Correct article usage
the construction
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 of
railway
Add an article
the railway
a railway
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,
while
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 now there is not, at the same time, there are new
hotel
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hotels
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 in the proposed plant,
whereas
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 there are not in
present
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the present
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 day. In
present
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the present
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 year, the village
is consist
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consists
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 of many shops in the middle right of the
map
Use synonyms
 that
surrounded
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are surrounded
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 by a path of the main
street
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.
As well as
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,
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 there are six houses just above the shops near the division of the main
street
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.
Moreover
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, there is a fishing port
that
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located in the middle right of the plan, with a small beach close to the fishing port. The main
street
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leat
Correct your spelling
leads
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 to
Maychester
Correct your spelling
Manchester
in
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at
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 the top left of the
the
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apply
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map
Use synonyms
, and to Lynwich at the lower left
to
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of
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 the
map
Use synonyms
. in 2024, it is
planed
Correct your spelling
planned
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 to construct
an
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a
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 railway
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
map
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 and
crossed
Wrong verb form
crosses
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 to the top right of the
map
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, with a new pathway from the main
street
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 surrounding
this
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 station. What is most striking is there are two
hotel
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hotels
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 in the middle with
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a resonable
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resonable
Correct your spelling
reasonable
some
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apply
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distance between them.
Fishing
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The fishing
A fishing
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 port is demolished and no longer
appear
Correct subject-verb agreement
appears
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in
Change preposition
on
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 the
map
Use synonyms
.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, street with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Anticipation
  • Significant
  • Conversion
  • Commercial activities
  • Expansion
  • Enhancing
  • Bypassing
  • Congestion
  • Connectivity
  • Recreational area
  • Demolition
  • Infrastructure
  • Preservation
  • Public transportation hub
  • Encourage
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